By Allan Danahay
On a stakeout for a client, private investigator Kelly Wynton sees a local gangster is involved in the case. The next night, after a car chase in town, Kelly runs across a murder victim. The next morning, the woman he’s been watching is found dead. Who killed whom? Why? Whatdo the murders have to do with a cat burglar known as Spiderman? Kelly must wade through the suspects, the corruption, and blackmail in order to ferret out the truth.
A nice complex murder mystery set in Australia. Some times I cringe when I receive mysteries set outside of America, but I took a chance with this one and wasn’t too disappointed.
James Kelly Wynton: 32, private investigator, loves jazz, drives a Ford Territory, former police officer, owns a Ducati Monster
“Spiderman”: 28, female, cat burglar, slender build, drives a Ducati Monster
Danielle: 16, large breasts, father is a lawyer
Damian Black: 20, drives a black Nissan Skyline, mechanic
Max Busby: James’ boss, fifties, former police officer
Charles Diamond: mid sixties, career criminal, drives an Audi, homosexual,
Terry Doyle: homicide investigator,
Elaine Norman: Brothel owner
Jonno Hetaraka: private investigator, drives a Nissan Murano SUV
Long cast of characters with just enough info to get a picture of them. Yes, Spiderman’s name is revealed later.
As mentioned below, run-on sentences which tended to make me lose the gist of the conversation. Most of the characters tend to speak this way.
Chapters headed by date and time. Except for the prologue, it is first person from Kelly’s POV. A lot of run-on sentences. In fact entire paragraphs consist of one sentence. Misuse of ellipsis and other incorrect and missing punctuation in many areas. The missing punctuation makes it very difficult to read and understand some of the shorter sentences, let alone the lengthy ones. Profanity. A few misspelled words. Writing could be tighter. Sentences often are too wordy or detailed to get the point across.
I like the story. It’s a well laid out plot, well told, good action. An all-around fine mystery but the above mistakes must reduce an otherwise higher rank to: