The Demeter Code
By Russell Brooks
Target: Umari. CIA operatives Ridley Fox and Nita Parris are back for another adventure in international intrigue. This time they’re after a terrorist named Umari. To track him down, they have to discover what is on a hard drive that is making its way through the underworld. What does it have to do with Sementem, an bio-agro company? Corporate sabotage? Or something more. And, while Fox and Parris reveal clue after clue, there are those who are out to eliminate loose ends.
This was complex plot to follow. Unlike a lot of thrillers, the author leads you on, showing glimpses of the whole picture. Sometimes, if you have everything laid out up front, you’re just seeing how the heroes get through the fight. If there’s mystery, well, that’s makes it a bit better.
Ridley Fox: 6’2”, CIA operative, former Joint Task Force Two operative, fiance was murdered two years before beginning of story, fluent in several languages, played football and rugby
Nita Parris: black, grew up in Barbados, participated in track, CIA operative, attended Princeton University, has a doctorate in Biology, mother dead, father absent in her life
Dewan Douglas: CIA computer whiz, black, 6′, thin
Tim Weyland: 5’9”, wears glasses, 150 pounds
Aubrey Lee Collins: married, wife is pregnant
Mitchell Staynor: CEO of Sementem, lost a son to meningitis
Katy Sparks: quality control agent for Elemental Food Services, has a microbiology degree, in financial straits
Monzer Alghafari: 60s, close cut gray hair, smoker and drinker, Syrian, owns and import/export business, deals in illegal weapons, had an older brother, married with four daughters, lives in Marbella, Spain,
Jill St. John: shoulder length blonde hair
There were a lot of characters in this one, some minor who didn’t last but one chapter, some introduced and saved for later. A lot of personalities to contend with, and the author sort of expects you to have read the first novel in this series. It’s not necessary, but a good idea.
When it comes to normal conversation, the dialogue is fine. When it comes to the action dialogue-threats of the bad guys, etc., it’s a bit weaker.
Chapters headed by location and time. Profanity. One sex scene. Tense problems. Error in numbers. In one chapter Alghafari is said to have had four daughters but in another he has three. Tighter writing needed: …each with a single red dot on their foreheads. This should read: …each with a single red dot on his forehead. ‘Each’ is singular. ‘Their’ is plural. ‘Each’ must match the next part of the sentence. Similar problems to Pandora’s Succession in ‘ing’ and ‘ly’ words and multiple ‘ing’ words in the same sentence inferring that several actions are taking place at the same time, which in many instances can’t happen. Overuse of ‘as’. Good technical knowledge that is explained without a lot of ‘big’ words that the reader can’t understand.
I enjoyed the complexity of the plot, but I did mention in the Pandora review that I expected the author to improve and not have so many mistakes. The ‘as’ the ‘ly’ words really were too much. So, I have to knock the rank down one belt.