Mortom

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By Erick Therme

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https://www.amazon.com/Mortom-Erik-Therme/dp/1495285936/ref=cm_cr_arp_d_product_top?ie=UTF8

Plot

Andy Crowl is the sole heir to his cousin’s house. Inside, he finds a dead rat…which starts him and his sister on a quest to solve the clues their cousin left for him. In doing so, family secrets are revealed.

An interesting puzzle case. I like those. Solve the clue, which leads to another, and another.

Characters

Andy Cowl: 30, smokes, likes puzzles, divorced

Kate Anne Crowl: Andy’s sister

Nate Shawler: shop owner, 300 lbs., scar on arm

Mary Moore: 5’, 200 lbs., aunt of Andy/Kate

Ricky Simms: cemetery groundskeeper, 60s, thick neck, widower

An interesting cast of characters. Mary has the most relevance to the game, but the others add to the plot.

Dialogue

Some good voices. Nate’s easy going, Kate’s whinging, Ricky’s yelling. Some overuse of ‘ly’ adverbs on tag lines.

Writing

Book is divided into Days. Relatively short chapters. A couple instances of mild profanity.

I thought the story flowed fairly well with some hiccups. There were several cliffhangers and the next chapter would start with the person already out of danger and an explanation of how. That was a bit of a let down.

Mild action but nothing real intense. The story seemed a bit disjointed in places, but it was pretty easy to follow. One of the clues didn’t make sense and was never explained, but the story wrapped up well and left me feeling a bit for Andy, because he didn’t know the story was over.

Anyway, clean error free writing and a pretty good book.

My Rank:

Purple Belt

Purple

Resthaven

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By Erik Therme

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https://www.amazon.com/Resthaven-Erik-Therme-ebook/dp/B01C3FFIYC/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1482781161&sr=8-1&keywords=resthaven%2C+therme

Plot

Kaylee is invited to a friend’s house for a party. The attendees end up in an abandoned retirement home for a scavenger hunt. The hunt doesn’t last too long when Kaylee encounters a deaf boy. From there, danger lurks around every corner, especially when they find themselves locked inside the building

Not quite what I expected. I didn’t expect a ghost story, but this has some suspense.

Characters

Kaylee: 15, father and mother having marital problems, blonde

Jamie: 15, blonde, parents dead, owns a cat, has a mole on her lip

Ethan: 15, Jamie’s twin brother, dark hair, freckles

Wren: 15 dark hair, beaky nose

Anna: mud brown hair

Sidney Elizabeth: braided pigtails for hair, parents in prison

I thought the characters were pretty good and they interacted well together. Only a couple had last names. Since the story centered on Kaylee, I didn’t see a lot of development from the others. Jamie was missing in the story for a long time and though the reason is explained, I thought she should have had more play in being Kaylee’s antagonist.

Dialogue

Reasonably good voices and conversations went okay. Not a lot of time for extraneous stuff, but the arguments between the girls played out well.

Writing

First person from Kaylee’s POV.

This book doesn’t have any chapters. Except for the epilogue, it’s one long scene. I think writing it this way is fine.

The story is more for the YA or NA crowd. As mentioned, It wasn’t what expected.

Some more descriptions about the building/the halls/rooms at the retirement home would have been good.

Otherwise, a fairly quick and error clean read.

My Rank:

Green Belt

Green

Electromancer

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By Daco

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https://www.amazon.com/Electromancer-Daco-ebook/dp/B01AOH7BFA/ref=sr_1_3?ie=UTF8&qid=1482117253&sr=8-3&keywords=electromancer

Plot

When the electricity utility heiress Alexa Manchester tries to give the world a great source of electricity, sabotage causes havoc and transforms her into a super being. Able to fly and fire bolts of electricity Alexa becomes Electromancer.

And just in time, too, for there is an evil force brewing, wanting to control the world. Momo and his henchmen who have created the Big Zapper.

It’s a fight for power, literally and figuratively, as Electromancer squares off against Momo. But she is not alone, for in the midst of battle, here comes another force to reckon with-The Blue Arrow.

Oh wow! I had fun reading this book. What an excellent plot. A new superhero book. I thought this plot was well crafted and well delivered. It made me want to believe in superheroes again. It threw a couple of twists that I didn’t see coming and sets up for a series…if Daco would like to write another book.

And I wish she would.

Characters

Alexa Manchester: parents dead, owns a power plant, 29, blonde, blue eyes, wealthy, owns a cat

Bigelow ‘Biggie’ Bitterman: 4’11”, drives a sedan, black hair

Sigfried Sawyer: 37, chauffeur/butler for Alexa, azure eyes, short sandy hair

Zachary Zero: alcoholic

Bobby Baumgartner: 37, mayor, owns a gold Lamborghini

What a wonderful cast of characters. I loved every one. From the elder council members to the slutty twins. From Alexa’s uncle to Professor Slipter. Great names, distinctive personalities. Great comic book characters without going over the top…well, not too much.

Dialogue

Of course the voices were all there. You knew every character by the words and tone of voice. Conversations were wonderful to read. I think there is just the right amount of dialogue. I think, too, there is just enough comic book bad guy dialogue to keep it humorous, yet, dramatic and fun.

Writing

Daco knows how to write.

No profanity except for a very minor instance. Chapters are headed by location, time, etc. Varying lengths of chapters, but mostly short.

A couple misspelled words.

Action is succinct and doesn’t drag.

As mentioned above, the story is presented with a well thought out sequence. You have the introduction to the heroine, the bad guy, and a couple of fun changes in characters. I won’t play spoiler, but the comic book fun doesn’t end.

And romance? Oh yes, there is a bit of spark (pun intended) between two characters.

If you want a fun read to escape from the world, this one is it. I love it. I want more.

My Rank:

Red Belt

Red

California Smoke

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By Hank Shaeffer

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https://www.amazon.com/California-Smoke-Hank-Shaeffer/dp/0996636323/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1481845545&sr=8-1&keywords=California+smoke

Plot

Ex-vice cop Eddie Fuentes just got bounced from the Oakland P.D., not an easy thing to do. Now he’s back in Redwood County, trying to figure out how his dope grower dad went off a bridge. And there’s this very sexy redhead who’s a little too good to be true.

Shanna Black is a drug lawyer in the crosshairs of a DEA investigation. She thinks Eddie could be part of her exit strategy — if only she can lure him into a certain situation without her client finding out.

Meanwhile, there’s a professional killer with a maniac for a kid brother and a shotgun-toting mom. And don’t forget Eddie’s old pool hustler pal, Russell George, a Native American developing his own little project called the Redwood Casino.

Sorry, I couldn’t think of any other way to describe the plot, so I took the blurb from Amazon. Let me say, there is a lot going on in this story. It’s complex with connections here and there.

Characters

Eddie Fuentes: former cop, blue eyes, light brown hair, dad dead

Shanna Black: lawyer, red hair, divorced, smokes

Russell George: American Indian, graying long hair

Dick: President of West Coast Lumber, thin blond hair, pale blue eyes

Actually, despite the comments below, the cast is interesting. A nice variety of personalities who develop throughout the book.

Dialogue

Good voices, but a lot of conversations with few beats between people speaking. I think this is one of the problems I had with this book is that everybody talks. A lot. Too much sometimes.

Otherwise, there are tag lines that shouldn’t be. …” she smiled. Smiled is an action, not a way of saying something.

Writing

Profanity. Titled chapters.

Okay, so problems I had with this. This book goes on for a long time with little action. There are many stories happening and I’m not a big fan of four or five subplots, especially with this many characters. For me, the story took awhile to develop and to get every story line straight and I admit, I lost track of things about half way through. I didn’t understand why certain things occurred other than to have another story going on.

Having this in mind, the book was clean of errors.

For me, this book was long and drawn out and I lost interest. One of the reasons is I thought this would be more humorous and it wasn’t.

My Rank:

Camouflage Belt

Camo

The Old Lady Detective Agency

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By Ryan Herrin

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https://www.amazon.com/Old-Lady-Detective-Agency/dp/153555777X/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1480892819&sr=8-1&keywords=the+old+lady+detective+agency

Plot

I present senior citizens Pam Breck and her friend Betty. Pam thinks everyone is up to nefarious deeds. When a local flea market is robbed, Pam and Betty are on the case. That is if Pam can keep from thinking about a mysterious pony-tailed man she swears is a criminal, and if she can stop thinking Betty might be the mastermind behind the robbery. Betty would rather watch junk television, buy an accordion, and figure out the brown stain on a tissue in her purse.

Okay, I like it and it kind of, sort of, almost works.

Characters

Pam Breck: multiple divorces, has a son, long silver hair, wears glasses, has a younger sister, drives a Buick Skylark

Betty: has a shot glass and porcelain figurine collection, has a dog, has children, curly dyed hair, multiple divorces

Ernie: flea market manager

Jared Massey: music dealer

Estelle: security guard

Albert: wears glasses, Pam’s son, 350 lbs.

Michael Wilson: owns a Pontiac

A lot of good characters. Some don’t have last names. If Betty’s was mentioned, I didn’t catch it. Pam’s didn’t show up until long into the book. Not too much description of characters so I wasn’t sure about Betty. I liked her and she was a good tag-along for Pam the go-getter.

Dialogue

For the most part everyone had a distinctive voice. Conversations tended to be short.

Writing

Too many semicolons at the beginning and they were misused.

No profanity

Some tense problems here and there.

Although I enjoyed the story I thought that it was a bit over the top. I felt that the author tried to hard to always add comedy. Comedy is tough in stories. There were a lot of repetitions that didn’t seem to go anywhere and some of the expository thoughts detracted from the main story. I thought there should have been more emphasis on the actual case, more clues, more witnesses. As mentioned, I liked Betty but she was pretty scatter-brained which, again, detracted from the main story. Maybe less extra stuff. The gang of women Betty and Pam hang with were mentioned and I thought they might have played a larger role.

Generally, some tighter writing was needed.

The action and tension were low. Maybe Pam and Betty needed to be in more danger.

Also, in regards to the actual mystery, I don’t think the case was ‘solved’ by anyone. Betty received her spotlight moment but I didn’t make the connection between Pam’s investigation and the solution. Pam’s Nero Wolfe or Ellery Queen’s gather-the-suspects-in-one-place-and-explain-everything faltered a bit.

If this is to be a series, it has potential, if a bit of reworking.

My Rank:

Green Belt

Green

FUGO

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By Elizabeth Young

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https://www.amazon.com/Fugo-Terror-Sky-Elizabeth-Young-ebook/dp/B01LXTALLL/ref=sr_1_9?ie=UTF8&qid=1480461447&sr=8-9&keywords=fugo

Plot

Terrorist plan to repeat the attack on America done by the Japanese in World War II. Hot air balloons filled with poison drop over various parts of the country. It’s up to the President and his team to find and stop the terrorist before worse attacks occur.

I think this was an ingenious plot. It lacked a central hero/heroine or hero team out searching for the bad guys.

Characters

Carmen: works at an electronics store, black hair

Raul: Carmen’s brother, works for the CIA

Elliot Bradley: U.S. President, former physicist and CEO of Markham Controls

Ahmed al Kodari: terrorist, has a twin sister

Maya Tchernov: 65, Defense Secretary, blonde hair, blue eyes, 4 star General, former lawyer and governor, parents dead, has a sister, widow

…and too many more. You need a roster and a time line to keep everyone straight and up-to-date. Though the characters were pretty good, I felt there were too many. I couldn’t focus on anyone in particular, because the story bounced from character to character.

Dialogue

Fairly good voices once you understood who the characters were but nobody shined. Too many.

Writing

Chapters headed by date.

As mentioned above, for me, I wanted a central figure to be in search of the terrorists throughout. There were a couple, but they weren’t central. The Washington team never left Washington so they became talking people who kept having meetings.

Low tension. Almost no real action.

The Prologue was not a prologue, it was a statement of information.

There was a bit of confusion at the beginning with time.

An incorrect name was mentioned in one chapter.

Relatively short chapters.

So, as always, my ranking reflects my enjoyment of the book. Others may find it intriguing. I found it a pretty even keel throughout.

My Rank:

Green Belt

Green

The Price Of Justice

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By Vincent S. Green

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https://www.amazon.com/Price-Justice-Vincent-S-Green-ebook/dp/B01M08366U/ref=sr_1_2?ie=UTF8&qid=1479521193&sr=8-2&keywords=price+of+justice

Plot

When the wife of a high ranking military man is brutally murdered, and her ex lover is arrested for the murder, Jack Garret is called in to try the case for the defense. Paired with attorney Cameron Wells, he soon runs afoul of people who want the case over, the defendant found guilty and everything hushed up. What could cause such violence? Jack and Cameron risk their lives to discover the truth.

I think is a wonderful plot and I wish the book had gone on longer to really explore everything.

Characters

Jack Garret: 45, attorney, former special ops, widower, has a son

Cameron Wells: attorney, former military intelligence, martial artist, blonde, freckles, hazel eyes, rank of Colonel

Frank O’Connor: judge, 50s, chestnut hair, rank of Colonel

Phillip Rubie: short, gray flecked black hair, brown eyes, fixer for the CIA, has a daughter, first wife and daughter dead

Norman Harris: Lt. General, tall, lanky, married (at the beginning)

A good array of characters. I would have liked the book to have been longer to explore each of them a bit more. As it was, a lot of information had to be absorbed pretty quickly.

Dialogue

I think Frank’s voice came through pretty well. Phillip’s daughter’s does, too.

Writing

Titled chapters. Profanity.

This is a relatively short book and I think therein lies the problem. This is a great story but details aren’t explored. There is good action, especially at the climax and even afterward. This is an intricate plot but it moved very fast. Within the first 50 pages, Jack’s son is kidnapped and I wondered why it was done so soon. Jack and Cameron hadn’t discovered anything yet. This could have been drawn out a bit more with scenes of the baddies talking and plotting, Jack and Cameron gathering clues. The trial was hardly a blip and that could have been a fun time. The super weapon wasn’t explored very much. It showed up, did its thing and hardly a word afterward. I thought it was a cool thing that needed to be shown more and explained more. No word on how it was made, what the deployment power was and where it went after everything was done.

A nice small twist at the end that was foreshadowed throughout.

My Rank:

Green Belt

Green

Severed

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By V. L. Towler

https://www.amazon.com/Severed-Novel-VL-Towler/dp/0996877215/ref=sr_1_8?ie=UTF8&qid=1479076277&sr=8-8&keywords=severed

Plot

A small Louisiana town’s police department receives a box with a severed finger. Enter Lula Logan, forensic anthropologist. With the help of the police department, she investigates a series of severed fingers and murders. What does a film producer and a politician have to do with the case?

I thought this would be a gritty, dark murder mystery. Instead it turned out to be a study into black life with the mystery as a small print second billing.

Characters

Lula Logan: black, dark brown hair, maroon eyes, 5’5”, forensic anthropologist, works at a university

Nate Padgett: captain of the Criminal Investigations unit, blut-grey eyes, black hair

Devon Lemonde: Junior police detective, Creole black, attended Nakadee University, married with children

Aggie Shear: auburn hair, forensic pathologist, divorced

Wally: Knights of Columbus member, former military

There are a few other characters: Bebe, Melvyn, Richard included. I think the author did a good job of providing a lot of background info on the important characters. I think the characters are well-rounded. I don’t know what Wally is. Part of the police department? Homeless? An eccentric who occasionally provides the cops with information? I just don’t know.

Dialogue

Good voices and accents and phraseology. I thought some of the dialogue went on too long and the conversations tended to delve into extraneous matters.

Writing

Book was separated into Parts. Titled Chapters. Chapters headed by date and time, scene changes headed by time

Okay, let me discuss this next part for just a bit. When I read a book, I expect the story to be something related to the back cover blurb. When it falls short of my expectations, I lose interest. As mentioned above, I thought this was going to be a good dark murder mystery. When Lula and Bebe spent page after page after page in the first part of the book discussing life for blacks in general, in Louisiana, their own lives, I lost interest in the story. I perked up whenever there was another finger or corpse and I could get back to the mystery, but for the most part, I lost interest. The scenes with the politician, although the topic related to the story, were a sideline that I didn’t care about. The mystery, as mentioned, was simmering, but never very action-oriented. A lot of interrogation, a lot of talking.

There was a videotape discovered. Writing page after page of the dialogue on the videotape was fine, but a repetition of this wasn’t needed.

I felt the tension was low, the ending climax was too long and mostly dialogue and the Epilogue wasn’t an epilogue but rather a “Hey, this is the end and stay tuned for the next mystery featuring Lula.”

I’m giving this a Green Belt because the grammar, punctuation, and spelling were okay and the voices were better than a lot of books. The story and plot, as a whole, wasn’t exciting for me.

Green

The “Tail” Of Rugby Jones

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By Claudia Broome

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https://www.amazon.com/Tail-Rugby-Jones-Rascals-Disability/dp/1535143827/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1479073122&sr=8-1&keywords=the+tail+of+rugby+jones

Plot

Rugby Jones is a Welsh Corgi who gets adopted and comes to live on a farm. There he meets other animals and has adventures then. One day, while playing with another dog, Rugby is injured and loses the ability to move his back legs. Rugby has to overcome his disability to be able to continue to live a full life.

Characters

Rugby Jones: Pembroke Welsh Corgi

Mom: owner of Rugby, blonde, left-handed

Dr. Dave: vet

Miracle: Calico cat

Foxie: red fox

Katie: Jack Russell Terrier

There are a lot of animal characters and a few humans in this book. Bits and pieces of information are know. Not too much but okay.

Dialogue

Mom is the only one who speaks. Well, there is a Rugby sentence or two, but Mom’s voice is always light-hearted even when she is not happy with Rugby.

Writing

Titled chapters.

1st person from Rugby’s POV.

Some missed quotation marks or quote in the wrong places in some dialogue.

This is more of a summary of the time with Rugby on the farm rather than a series of stories. There are incidents and anecdotes but they don’t last too long.

It’s presented as if Rugby is speaking to a group of kids because he asks a lot of questions to the reader that relate to his experiences in the book.

The book is positive and uplifting and speaks to those with disabilities. It’s a longer children’s book than most but there are illustrations (although some of them are seem ‘photoshopped’ which doesn’t quite work for me).

Still, I chose to review because I like animal stories and I wanted to see how well one with an animal that overcomes an injury was written.

My rank:

Blue Belt

Blue

Forbidden Birth

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By Dr. William Rubin

https://www.amazon.com/Forbidden-Birth-Ravello-Medical-Thriller/dp/099759490X/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1478042402&sr=8-1&keywords=forbidden+birth

Plot

Somebody is killing pregnant women and removing their babies. Newly commissioned investigator, Dr. Christopher Ravello is assigned the case. He and his partner track down the clues, but more bodies are found. How does a mobster and a stem cell researcher fit in? When the situation turns personal, the case heats up and the tension is thick.

This is an interesting plot with lots of medical material, a serial killer, and a venture into what might be just around the corner for scientific discovery.

Characters

Christopher Ravello: homicide investigator, former general surgeon, married with kids, mother dead

Ray Petersen: chief of detectives

Kevin Kennedy: Ravello’s partner, body builder, sister dead

April Cassidy: long brown hair, stripper

Johnny Briganti: doctor, drug maker, bouncer

There is no shortage of characters and I think they were fairly well developed. The similarity of Ravello and Kennedy both having relatives murdered made them seem closer than their otherwise long friendship. I thought Briganti was a pretty good character, but he fell by the wayside and his subplot with the mob also was forgotten.

Dialogue

The serial killer is named The Giver. He has a lot of spoken dialogue that is only for himself. It was okay, but not natural. Voices were pretty good and distinction.

Writing

Profanity. 1st person from Ravello’s POV in his scenes, third person POV in other chapters.

There was a lot of medical-ese given with not a lot of explanation.

I thought the story flowed pretty well, up until the latter chapters. I felt in the last 20 or 30 pages, the story was rushed. Ravello was blackmailed into doing some things he normally wouldn’t do and I felt those scenes were rushed. They happened too quickly to get to the climax. Because of this his emotions were almost lost. I didn’t get to see the internal debate, the sacrificing of morals. I think this part could have been lengthened to show the tortuous moments of his going against his sense of right and wrong.

My Rank:

Green Belt

Green